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She was artsy.
She was odd.
She was a victim of the mob.

No one liked her.
No one cared.
They'd make fun or sit and stare.

She didn't cry.
She didn't fight.
She just let them take her rights.

A month went on,
And then one more.
All of their ridicules, alone she bore.

It all built up,
Until one night.
The "bulb" went off- she saw false light.

She chose her fate,
Then and there.
No one would miss her, since no one cared.
I wrote this about a girl who is tormented and teased at school until she reaches her breaking point and commits suicide. No, I am not suicidal. I wrote this because there are so many stories about kids committing suicide these days, and I think we all need to consider why this is happening; my criminology class talked about this last week, and we read a story about a boy who was picked on until he finally hung himself in his closet one night. We need to be thinking about how we treat others, and how our words, actions, and body language can affect other people more than we'd ever imagine. Next time you are getting ready to say something rude, unfriendly, discouraging, or in any way unkind, think about what may be at stake....

(C) A.greenlaw 2010
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MaxSnackTime Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2015
Feels...
Reminds me of someone.
+1 to my Favs. Thank you.
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2015  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you...I'm sad you can kinda relate though. This topic saddens me greatly and I know it's such a big issue these days. >.>''
Take care. :3
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WhisperTheCatAJ Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Student Writer
I feel like this all the time..
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
:( Do you have anyone you can at least talk to about stuff? =/
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Hedwigs-art Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Sadly, also the story of My lif... 
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
:C Don't let them get to you!
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Hedwigs-art Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Trying... Well, all is okay for now... Not good but not bad enough to allow me to call it bad... You learn to live with the whispering, the giggling, the legs in the hallways that want to trip over them... It doesn't make it better though... 
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Hang in there! :luv:  If you ever need to talk seriously feel free to message me! I'm always available.  I hate to see anyone let bullies get to them. Little Pixel Heart 
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Hedwigs-art Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you =)
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SkrillexxFH Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Story of my life.
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Do you get made fun of? sad 
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Ozeisoul Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sad :(
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner May 9, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
:sniff:
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Ozeisoul Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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Zoeshep Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
*cries*
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NooniePuuBunny Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Indeed
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
:nod:
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Nyakune-Yami Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
God, I know how that feels. I am so grateful every day that I didn't go through with it like I so badly wanted to in sixth grade. Screw the norm, screw society, I am myself, and you know what? I love myself. That's all I need.
These types of poems really need to be written more often, and now that I see this one and think of how I went through this feeling of being pitched against the world and losing, I feel ashamed that I haven't written one yet. I'm going to add it to my list of things to do.
Well done, well said, and very well appreciated.
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you so much for your kind words. I am glad you can relate and that you didn't go through with it. I myself came very close, but thankfully was caught and got help. You should watch the movie Cyberbully. It's soo good. Very eye opening and realistic. Good luck on your writing!
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Nyakune-Yami Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank god you got help! Otherwise I wouldn't have gotten to read your wonderful poem! I'll watch that movie sometime, thanks~!
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Miss-A-sketches Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
My favorite line in your poem....

"The bulb went off -she saw false light"

Very well thought out!

I totally agree with you. To me, tolerance for all is key, even if you don't get someone, or don't share their beliefs, that doesn't mean you can't be civil. Your life is not their life. You don't know what miles they've walked to get where they are, anymore than they know how far you've traveled on your life's path.
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Exactly! I agree completely. I'm so glad you appreciate my poem- thanks for the encouragement. :>
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Miss-A-sketches Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You are very welcome!
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Miss-A-sketches Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh yea, and I don't think I've featured Literature before.....this is good, thoughtful, and to the point, so....

You've been featured at:

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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
WOW! Thank you for the feature!! I am flattered. :3
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Miss-A-sketches Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You deserved it! :D
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Corporal34 Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011  Student Writer
Very deep
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you. :nod:
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SasukeIsMine08 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
This is really strong. And I agree with you. It's pathetic how people constantly pick on others. Some of my friends don't seem to get that though. They don't understand that words really do hurt. That sticks and stones thing is crap. But anyway this was written really well!
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Aw thank you so much. I'm glad you agree with me!! :]
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SasukeIsMine08 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
;) Oh wow I just realized part of your sig. Is part of my schools motto! Thats cool
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:la:
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SasukeIsMine08 Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011
lol sorry that was kind of random of me.
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Kuwaizair Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2010
why do they do that when they can just find ways to hurt their torumenters by any means? If you are weak over something and get picked on about it, use what your opponent is weak aginst.

I had one kid pick on me all the time till I wiped out a 'fat whale joke' and told him i'd give him a sardine if he could jump and do a flip over the teacher's pointing stick.

bawwwwwwwwwww bawhhhhhhhhh bawwwwwww.

why kill yourself when you can destroy the kneecaps of those who hurt you?
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Well unfortunately people are not as strong-willed or courageous as you? Lots of people feel like they can't defend themselves, for whatever reason. I'm glad your tactic worked for you! ^_^ bahaha
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Kuwaizair Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2010
well i should of done more. maybe her attacks were worse. but then again i guess i'm not as good as i was when younger.

an eye for eye thing. i guess.

the thing that gets me is growing up so many of us are fed 'its just words' 'ignore them it is just words'
but now cyber bullying is 'omg so mean harsh a crime'

what happend to 'it is just words'? if someone is told to suck it up/ignore in school for name calling or slander, why is it now... in impersonal anon text it is 'worse'

really.

why is it ok for the boy in school to (well no truth to it) go on and one daily 'i saw yur mom the bag lady begging me for money' everyday but if I did that to a classmate on Myspace if i was in that age again...OHH they want to cry "suspension"
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ratane Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2010
Gewd job! I can totaly c imagery to go with this.
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
Really?! Thanks!! :D
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Paul-Pepper Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2010   Writer
Strong stuff there x
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
It is. But suicide is even stronger >.>
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Paul-Pepper Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2010   Writer
Been there haha, gota take it as it comes, and if you get out the otherside it's good to laugh. x
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fotomademoiselle Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
True that! XD
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